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There is so much blood. It's pouring out of faster than we could begin to staunch it. Our eyes meet. He has the tape, I have the bandages. We are enemies. Am I willing to die, just to take another with me? Is he? Our eyes meet again. The answer is clear: No, we are not. We trade supplies. I stand up slowly. He does the same. We grab our guns, look each other in the eye a third time, and limp back to our prospective camps. We know what we are fighting for. Freedom. Justice. We are soldiers. Only soldiers. Insignificant pawns in the overall plan of war. Like Che said, “Shoot me. You will only kill a man.” Our deaths would have been pointless.

Shots go off in the distance. I limp faster. A little girl is running, doll in hand, opposite me on the path. Unable to avoid it, we inevitably crash and fall. She stands up, I have her doll. She reaches for it. More shots go off, nearer now. The girl is still reaching. She falls. There is a bullet in her back. She died instantly. Tears well up in my eyes. Another innocent bystander. Another statistic of war. Soldiers fill the clearing. They are my fellow men. They grab the girl, tossing her away from me. My world slows, her body twists, showing her blank face. She explodes. A bomb, they told me later, was implanted within her. They were giving her a mercy killing. I'm in shock. I can here someone sobbing. It's me. I'm sobbing. I'm still holding the doll, too. I hug it to me, using it for the smallest of comforts.

I limp out of the tent. No one asks any questions as I go by. They are silent, knowing. I return the clearing. I find him there. The enemy. He is kneeling next to the stained, burnt spot of ground. Our eyes meet for the final time. I hand him the doll. He stares silently at it, tears streaming down his face. This is war.
"War...huh...yeah
What is it good for?
Absolutely nothing" ~Edwin Starr
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loverz116 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2009
[link] featured! :heart:
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Kitz-the-Kitsune Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Thank you~
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loverz116 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2009
:heart:
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sagethegardener Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2008
Such a beautiful piece. I've tears steaming down my face now.
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Kitz-the-Kitsune Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :) =hands you tissue box=
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drop-asd Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2008
Absolutely incredible. The descriptions are brief but incredibly strong and gripping. I love the ending, I think this is one of the beautiful sides of death - making enemies cry together. :tears: It affected me really strongly.
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Kitz-the-Kitsune Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: :blush:
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Garnet-43 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2007
A gripping piece. Well done.
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Kitz-the-Kitsune Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Thnx!
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37minutestomonday Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007
Ooh, this is so very different from everything I've grown used to hearing from you during the course of today. It's very well-written though and rather chilling
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Kitz-the-Kitsune Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
It's one of my more recent. I'm taking a little break from my silly one-shots. Trying to put that back into Jungle. It's getting a bit serious, doncha think?
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37minutestomonday Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007
I think that it's reached a point where it kind of needs to be serious. For the moment anyway. The occasional nervous joke or hilarious snide comment by Creeing wouldn't at all be out of place though :D I do think that sometimes the drama needs to be upheld for as long as possible so that the audience will take the plot seriously, otherwise you run the risk of them thinking that you're trying to be clever and funny and failing because it's at an inappropriate place. And nobody wants that. Don't TRY to do anything, just write it how it flows and it'll rule :D
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Kitz-the-Kitsune Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome, thnx.
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Lovely-O Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2007   Writer
Terse, conscise, holding all their meaning in just a few words--like orders. this reminds me of All Quiet on the Western Front, only modern day. i like it. and yes, "compelling" is very true.
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Kitz-the-Kitsune Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
I've never gotten around to reading that. I think I shall. Thank you.
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thewingsarewide Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2007
yea it is really compelling, you created a strong visual sense in this!, well done :)
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Kitz-the-Kitsune Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Creeing Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2007
Very good, very compelling. Maybe break it up at some parts, make it easier to read.
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